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she remembers watching the sunset from her father shoulders and thinking that it was as if the sun was dying. as if its long life was slowly falling away behind the skyline and that it sprayed colors across the ever-darkening sky to remind people that death is a beautiful thing. that in the morning, a new sun would rise and everything will be bright.
when she dies, she wants to go out like a sunrise. she wants people to watch in awe as she changes everything just one last time and makes death beautiful.

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she's older now, and she imagines that death is like being awake at night; the comforting silence and the dark that accompanies it. feeling like you're nowhere, that nothing exists. on the outside, everything will be like a sunset but on the inside of death you'll be alone, but you'll be safe and nothing will hurt you.
then a new sun will rise in your place as you watch the colors of the sunrise that you ever so often forgot about. this new sun will warm the hearts of your mourners and eventually your place in the darkness will be forgotten.

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when she was nine, there was a pigeon sprawled across the road at the end of their driveway. she sat in the gutter, her bare feet splashing in the water as she tried to see the dark red blood as the pigeons sunset. she watched as cars drove over it and picked up more and more of its loose, wet feathers and carried them away.the blood eventually dried in the sun and she wondered when the pigeon's new sun would rise.
her father came out of the house and picked her up and carried her inside. she cried a little that night. her father came in and sat on the end of her bed, stroking her hair.

'dad, do you think pigeons mourn?'
'i don't know sweetie, they might'
i overheard that dialouge.
on the train.
a while ago.
i can't forget it.
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Kizin-of-kaplumba Featured By Owner May 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Ive been a fan of yours for years and this has always been one of my favorite pieces of yours
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner May 9, 2010
Aw thank you so much :heart:
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Kizin-of-kaplumba Featured By Owner May 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome
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onahighway Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010
this is a gorgeous bit of writing. I love how you take three instances in the girl's life and create a very coherent story out of them. I dunno, I find this incredibly inspiring.

The connection between a sunset and blood spatter is so beautiful and I love how you mention the 'splatter' in the first paragraph yet you do not connect it to blood right then. I did though, in my thoughts.

I love such a wonderful blend of prose and poetry. its really refreshing and I see a lot of myself in this writing. Well, not so much the things I write now but I did a few years ago. Your repetition especially.

I've got a love for uncapitalized letters and the ' 's.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
I think a lot of things that happen, and the way we react to them are very much influences by our previous experiences. Someone, say who has had parents seperate, may handle arguments better purely because of their intense dislike of the process of seperation and how many different people it affects.
Thank you very much. It means a lot :heart:
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onahighway Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
well of course! The people we end up being are more creations of our experiences rather than our genetics. I guess that's really why I liked this piece. I like seeing where characters have come from and why they act the ways they do.

Your very welcome!
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
Definitely true. But our genetics always has something to do with the way we react to instances that we have no experience with - whether we get angry, upset, find comfort in other people etc.
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onahighway Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
yes, it definitely does have some role in our personalities.
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Squirrel-23 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2009
Oh, my GOD.
I don't think I've been hit that hard in a long time.
This is beautiful the way you'd think death is.
I love it. Intensely.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2009
thank you so, so much :heart:
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Squirrel-23 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2009
No problem. Honestly, my pleasure. :]
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wingedlegend Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
wow that is seriously amazing
truely beautiful
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
thank you :heart:
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wingedlegend Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2009
your welcome
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gothgirlbrandi2 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2009
That's really beutiful. I love the feeling I get reading the second paragraph.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009
thank you.
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gothgirlbrandi2 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009
You're so very welcome!
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milora Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009
Ah. This is rather beautiful. If only my computer did not have that stupid fan, it would be quiet here, too.


The fact that the dialogue is real just makes this a nicer story.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
turn the fan off?

thank you.
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You've been featured here: [link]

I really hope you don't mind. I wanted to share your excellent work with my watchers and visitors! I really love it~:heart:
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
of course i don't mind.
thank you :heart:
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Sure~ I always check because I've had a few complaints in the past. Thanks for letting me feature you =D
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kokutan-tenshi Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009  Student General Artist
Incredible
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009
thank you <3
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x-Mercy-Dimwit-x Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2009  Student General Artist
wow i love that! :love: i think peigions mourn.
xx
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009
thank you.
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x-Mercy-Dimwit-x Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Student General Artist
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its alright x
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seanfhocal Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009
Beautiful. I think that that would be the best afterlife. to just ... rest. close my eyes and sleep, forever... dream
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009
i agree.
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oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009
oh. my. gosh.
this is stunningly beautiful. <3
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009
thank you so much.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
We know it is. We know it isn't.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
too true.
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Wildfire222 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
That was fantastic. There was a lot of emotion in those words and I loved it.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
thank you so much. :heart:
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smileygirl12 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
only if death was like that
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
how do you know it's not?
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Ninkette Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Student
thats absolutely beautiful <3
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
thank you very much.
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Ninkette Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Student
no problem ^_^
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
someone said that ? >:[
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
yes, a little girl in a blue dress asked her dad.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
oh damn.
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
i know. i was like :|
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
gahh, kids...
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
they're cute.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
ehh
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Sepulchral-Roses Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
this is phenomenal and more than kind of beautiful.:heart:
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rachel-rhapsody Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
aw thank you so much.
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lemmingtimes Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
This is beautiful! <3
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